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Intro to Jade, Rewritten

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“March!” The head General shouts out, his shoulders back, head up, hands clasped and resting at his lower back. He’s six feet tall, from what I can see from here. I can also tell that he has a pair of wings, folded against his uniform. His dark green skin glistens with sweat; obviously he has been working before we recruits came along.

“March!” he shouts again, his voice deep and loud. He has red hair that contrasts his skin and is cut jaggedly just above his shoulders, which are bare. He’s wearing multi-pocketed, triple-belted cargo pants with heavy-looking black boots. His pants are tucked into his boots, and I can see that he has a knife in each boot; the hilts are sticking out, glinting in the orange moonlight.

“Stand! Face front!” he orders. The line of recruits turns and faces him. We try to move in sync with each other, but it’s more difficult than it seems.

“I will assign you each to a mentor,” he lifts one arm and points to a line of men and women in similar uniforms to his. “Some of you will have the same mentor.” He nods towards the group of mentors.

The first one says, “Mell.” Clearly it is her name. She is wearing the same uniform as the head General, and she has smooth red skin.

the next mentor says his name, which is Arik. He has green skin as well, but his is more blue than the drill sergeant’s.

The third mentor’s name is Max. I can’t tell if Max is a boy or a girl; Max has a shaved head and has his or her uniform jacket on, which is bulky enough to hide whether Max has breasts or not. Max also has dark blue skin.

The fourth mentor is a red-skinned woman with the name Fifa.

The fifth mentor’s name is Goren, and he has light green skin with reddish freckles across his face.

The sixth mentor says that his name is Sebb. He’s got yellow skin.

“My name is Jem, and I am the seventh mentor,” the head General announces. “The other mentors are Generals, and you will refer to them as General, and Sir.” He moves to the end of the line of recruits. He sends them off to different mentors, skipping over me. Four of the mentors have two recruits, and the two have only one. I am the only recruit that has not been assigned a mentor yet. General Jem stands in front of me, taller only by two inches. “I will mentor you,” he says. “What’s your name?”

“Jade,” I say, then remember what he said earlier and add on, “sir.”
Jem nods approvingly, a lock of red hair falling forward into his face. “Follow me.” He turns and starts walking towards the door. I follow him eagerly, yearning to see the rest of the facility.
wow that was a shitty title. ANYWAY. I'm rewriting Jade's timeline thing, but I had to rename a bunch of characters because of copyright. If you want to know who's who, just let me know and I'll tell you.

this needs editing. badly. and i'm sorry about the weird formatting...I'm not sure what's going on with that.

part one: you are here
part two: [link]
part three: [link]
part four: [link]
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